So this is the first "challenge" of Rachel Harrie's Campaign dealie. As usual it's a flash fiction prompt. Boring.
This time it has to start with "shadows crept across the wall". Oooooh, that's such a difficult challenge. If they're going to mail in the prompts then I guess I'll mail in the story too. So time to get out an envelope and a new 50-cent stamp and put this sucker in the box.
Dull Shadows
Shadows crept across the wall...He stopped typing and shook his head. What a terrible way to start a story. Shadows don't creep unless they're like Dracula's shadow in that awful Francis Ford Coppola movie. Might as well start it off with "It was a dark and stormy night..." He took the piece of paper out of the typewriter and then fetched another so that he could start over.
Before he could hit the keys, a shape came hurtling across the room with a scream. Bobby landed right in his lap. "Hi, Daddy!"
"Hey, slugger. What's up?"
"You wanna hear a joke?"
"Sure, kid. Then Daddy has to get back to work."
"Knock knock."
"Who's there?"
"Orange."
"Orange who?"
"Orange you glad I didn't say banana?"
Though he'd heard that joke back when he was five years old, he laughed anyway. Then he picked Bobby up to tuck him in. Later he could get back to trying to write.
There you go. That took me like ten minutes to write. I hope they step it up a little for the next and final "challenge." Nah, it'll probably be another flash fiction prompt where you have to use some obscure word no one except Mr. Burns would use anymore.
Such a cynic. Good dialogue, except I knew where it was going.
ReplyDeleteI'm #43 if you're reading from fellow campaigners.
Haha that happens to my mom all the time! We'll be writing together and my little brother will come along and ask her to do something. Cute entry! Great job :)
ReplyDeleteI'm entry #19
How do you REALLY feel about flash fiction prompts and challenges? *grin*
ReplyDeleteI'm #56 if you aren't too bored to read my entry. ;)
You remind me of my grumpy dad! You blew your cover, though, when Bobby came into the room:)
ReplyDeleteI have to say I liked what you did. Thank goodness it wasn't another horror entry. Thank goodness for little Bobby.
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I really liked how the knock-knock joke incorporated the word "orange." That was cute.
ReplyDeleteHaha This was cute and original!
ReplyDeleteGrumpy, indeed. ;) Well done!
ReplyDeleteClever. I'm expecting people to generally go with a darker tone, so this'll probably be a comparable breath of fresh air!
ReplyDeleteExcellent!
ReplyDeleteHa, this stupid thing is a lot more popular than my political entry.
ReplyDeleteI needed that laugh today. Clever piece!
ReplyDeleteHa, cute story!
ReplyDeleteHmm... This just screams Tib at me. Too bad I didn't join the campaign this time. Except not.
ReplyDeleteWow. Grumpy got popular with this one. I know you said you've sold out, but I'm not entirely sure I believe you. Sounds like you're still trying to cling to your grumpy principals. If you're going to sell out then really sell out. Be happy about your blogfests and challenges.
ReplyDeleteI'm tempted to delete every comment with the word "cute" in it.
ReplyDeleteAwesome. Just awesome.
ReplyDeleteNot gonna even gloss over it, this is the only entry I've read so far. Aw yeah.
ReplyDeleteLike a slice of life, Grumpy. Nice one! :)
ReplyDeleteI think you may need to up the grumpiness or change your name to irascible puppy. People think you're cute!
ReplyDeleteGrumpy goes on cynic drive
ReplyDeletesays he's bored of it all
Grumpy goes back to tapping words
for all their worth.
Sorry, it didn't let me finish...
ReplyDeletebetting that's the very thing
they come back for.
It's really cute...just kidding. I don't like writing from prompts either.
ReplyDeleteI thought for a second there that the Dad was going to pick Bobby up and hurl him across the room for telling such a crappy joke.
ReplyDeleteYou know, Rachael asks for volunteers to help with the campaign. If you have ideas on how to make it better, you should approach her with one that doesn't involve calling her creation "stupid".
ReplyDeleteYeah but no one listens to me. I mean you don't even listen to me and you've known me for like two years.
DeleteWait, it's only been one year. Really? My time sense is all messed up.
DeleteI listen to you when you have something worth listening to. I forwarded your email to her and she said that you are welcome to drop her from your "Google Reader" if you are really that upset with how she is doing the platform thing. Honestly, it is more a pain in the ass than you realize. So many people are 12:00 Blinkers.
DeleteSee, I make a suggestion and everyone gets all pissy about it.
DeleteWhat's a 12:00 blinker?
ReplyDeleteI asked the same question on Twitter and I guess it's someone too dumb and/or lazy to program a clock on a VCR, microwave, etc.
DeleteIn this context, I'm assuming that means people that sign up to passively get the rewards of "participating" without actually doing anything.
ReplyDeleteWell, you do have a nice flow with your writing. Nice change of pace with the added humor.
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed the story, enjoyed the comments even more.
ReplyDeleteThis was so cute, I love the cute cuteness of it, it made me think of cute cuteys who write cute stuff. :) (Sorry, but honestly.. I had to do it after the deleting cute threat). Cuteness aside, very original and interesting. I enjoyed it immensely, even though it lacked any sweetness at all. (See what I did there?)
ReplyDeleteThey always say to be true to your voice and you have clearly done that, so congratulations!
ReplyDeleteVery entertaining. I can feel the cynicism seeping from your every pore. Thanks for the cute joke, I'm sure my cute kids will love it ;)
ReplyDeleteThanks for the laugh Mr. Grumpy! I love how you twisted the prompt to suit your own purposes. I didn't go with the horror theme either.
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You sound like a grumpy writer, but a great Dad. I liked your unique take on the challenge. :)
ReplyDelete(BTW, I'm Susan from My Withershins. Don't let the Humpty Dumpty name fool you. For some reason Blogspot doesn't always let us Wordpress folks comment, so I'm using an old ID)
Ha ha ha. I'm a great fiction writer then because I'm no kind of dad. Not even much of an uncle.
DeleteSnarky AND grumpy! Leave it to you, GB. Still, it was cute.
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Great.
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